Q. Did I do better in making Jack more realistic or do you still think he's out there?
A. I did notice that it got slightly better, but it seemed unnatural when an entire paragraph was him explaining something. It became awkward writing and run-on sentences.
Jun 15th 2019 18:26
Q. Shall we continue our RP? Also, any critiques for me in our roleplay?
A. Hi! Yes, sorry I haven't replied enough. And you're doing pretty good for me, but the reactions of Jack can be a little over-zealous and a tad unrealistic for him. But a pleasant writing style!
Jun 14th 2019 10:36